Star Wars

Right. This is just a quick draft of the idea, mainly for my own benefit, but I thought I'd stick it here incase anyone wants to see what I'm going to be working on as of monday. Obviously as most will know I'm working on clone wars at TT and i've been a bit inspired. So without further ado, here is what I'm looking to start atm.


Luten born on an outer rim world, inteh makori, to isilme, human, and arikai, presumed human. 15. Buzzed, white hair and skin. Home attacked by pirates and destroyed. During the defence his father tells him to find a jedi master on Coruscant who was his old friend to request fostering and training. Sends him off in a ship with auto guidance to coruscant. On arrival meets with several masters who sense no force in him but a human jedi named dergometh meets with him. Sensing something odd in him and asks for him to be made his padawan to see how he fares despite his age. Council disagrees but dergg convinces them. An old master by this time being 52. Tests his force capabity at first and finds nothing. Then tests him in combat training to find he is unsurpassed, fighting with an old technique he remembers from his youth but doesn't know where. Takes him to build his first lightsaber. He picks odd crystals never thought to work and derg then knows there is something in him worth training, though has no idea how to tap into his force sensitivity. They go on missions together ridding places of threat and meet the sith on a planet building up a strong fortress. Derg wants backup but luten charges into battle with some of the scout guards. Beats them both easily with his prowess and manages to evade all the force used against him to the shock of his master. They take out the key defences of the base and infiltrate the base to stop their plans as a jedi force arrive and purge the sith. Luten is honoured finaly by the council for ridding them of this threat and is granted the title of jedi, despite lacking a connection to the force, however he will be unable to take a padawan or be sent on missions without a true jedi. He travels to the jedi temple for more studies into the force and learns more about the dark side, finding in his studies it's a misconception that it is truly dark. All practitioners are just evil. He meets vereyu metaeguer, a twilek jedi here and falls in love, but thinks nothing of it due to his alienation from the ideals of the light and dark side. During this time, though still travelling with derg he does missions with other jedi, including vereyu. After some time he goes on to teach combat in the academy, purely with lightsaber combat, at which time he takes to using the sith favoured saberstaff. War breaks out in several systems and the jedi are dispatched. Here derg and luten barely escape death by many sith hands and luten thinks of vereyu in danger. A sign of the force awakening in him. Dergometh protests at first in going but seeing as their post has been reaffirmed they depart to a nearby system. Upon entering the system they see a sith blockade bombarding the planet. Hurrying to vereyus last known post they find a huge battle. Rushing through the fire and calamity they see vereyu fighting alongside 2 more jedi onset by numerous troopers. They smash through a wave of them in time to see vereyu shot several times and cut down by a sith blade from behind. Luten screams and reaches out with force, breaking the siths neck, then charging to her, dropping his saber as he reaches her body. Turning to the shocked platoon of troops, who see a burning blue jedi, he stands arms at sides, pulls vereyus saber and his own to his hands. The troops begin firing as luten charges them. He throws a wave of force knocking the entire wave down and destroys them all then rushes to vereyus corpse. Dergometh asks him what happened, the blue fire now gone from luten. He doesn't realise he's just used the force to destroy the troops and dergometh says nothing. They head back to coruscant with vereyu for a burial. The council are told what happened during the fight and they confront luten, telling him that he is straying a dark path. He tells them there is no dark and light. He knows the boundaries of the being good and evil. He dismisses the jedi as fools. He stays to see his love burn then leaves the council, renouncing their stupidity.


Right, I know the ending is a bit more fleshed out but coming home this is what i was thinking of one night. And it's a long way home. I currently have that end scene where luten sees vereyu die and he slaughters all the troops playing over and over in my head, day in day out. So i'm gonna see if i can't get something coherent written down. Also this is likely going to be set in the old republic era. Just need to choose one of the sith wars with the republic to choose that it'll be set in. who knows, thousands of years to play with so i could make a minor insurgency or some such. Cheers